Wednesday, 12 November 2014

Proof


                                                                               Photo prompt-copyright-Rochelle Wisoff-Fields



She stood still for some time; then she raised her finger and pointed towards the sky.
Everyone stopped and looked up. They could see nothing but deep blue sky.
She shrieked and started trembling, “Its happening. Yes, it’s happening.”
Everyone felt a scare. Everyone stood unsure of himself.
“There is something shinning in the sky, I see it over there,” said a girl. She was behind the woman who kept repeating, “It’s happening.”
One by one people started moving away; everyone appeared apprehensive; everyone expected something unseemly to happen.
The woman asked the girl, “Did I prove my point?”
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  1. Anonymous13 November 2014 at 00:55

    I like the repetition in this. I'm not sure that the point is that she's proving, but I like it. (Do you need 'the' in front of 'woman' in the last line?
    Claire

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  2. i b arora13 November 2014 at 08:34

    thanks Claire for reading, you were right about 'the', i have edited the post

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  3. Anonymous13 November 2014 at 20:57

    This reminds me of an "I Love Lucy" episode where she and Ethel distracted people in an art gallery by staring up at the ceiling and appearing to see something amazing while Ricky and Fred put back a painting. :-) It works and not just in your story (but maybe not for Lucy!)

    janet

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    1. i b arora13 November 2014 at 22:56

      thanks Janet, i feel great, nice you saw the point i was trying to make, thanks

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  4. brudberg14 November 2014 at 02:35

    Somehow there are places where there are more clothes than emperors.. and there are places where there is a big fuzz when neither are.

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  5. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields14 November 2014 at 14:59

    Dear IB.

    Love it. Mob mentality. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. i b arora14 November 2014 at 18:55

      thanks, feels nice when someone takes out time to read the post, i personally i am scared of mob mentality, it can have horrifying consequences

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  6. Dawn Q.16 November 2014 at 22:36

    There will always be lemmings! Nice job of proving that point. ;-)

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    1. i b arora17 November 2014 at 08:46

      great you liked it and thanks, Dawn, for reading and commenting

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  7. liz young16 November 2014 at 23:10

    Youbdo realisecthat some of us are going to try this now, don't you?

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