Thursday, 13 December 2018


The God of Soldiers


‘That’s the replica of Mars…..’
‘I can’t believe it……’
‘Yes, my grandpa made it for me….. He loves me so much…’
‘Does he tell you funny stories?’
‘Of course, I never miss my… my mom and dad.’
‘But he keeps shouting at you?’
‘No, no. Never!’
‘Did he love your mom?’
‘Yes, always.’
‘Why did he make this…?  Mars?’
‘He was a soldier. And Mars is the god of soldiers. He says Mars saved his life, many times.’
‘Still?’
The boy was about to say something, but the colour faded from his tiny eyes. The grandpa was staring at him from the upper window.
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A post for Friday Fictioneers on a photo prompt.
Word count 104

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26 comments:

  1. Neil MacDonald13 December 2018 at 14:26

    The reader knows what the boy won't state. Cleverly done

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  2. Iain Kelly13 December 2018 at 14:39

    Doesn't sound like a happy life.

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  3. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields13 December 2018 at 17:14

    Dear Arora,

    Methinks the boy doth protest too much.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  4. Sandra Crook13 December 2018 at 20:51

    Fear or loyalty... the former I guess.

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  5. plaridel14 December 2018 at 04:58

    sad, it looks like grandpa trained him well.

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  6. Dale14 December 2018 at 05:44

    So sad... I always say when someone tries too hard to say another is good... they are trying to convince themselves.

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    1. i b arora14 December 2018 at 08:55

      sure, you got what i was trying to convey, thanks

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  7. Abhijit Ray14 December 2018 at 13:53

    The grandpa is a tyrant, is he?

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  8. Keith's Ramblings14 December 2018 at 17:30

    There are are several ways this can be interpreted, but he sounds like a troubled child to me.

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  9. Violet Lentz14 December 2018 at 17:56

    Oh my. That last line hit me like a ton of bricks. Excellent write.

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  10. Linda14 December 2018 at 22:05

    Classic symptom sof abuse, denial, possible PTSD. I have an hour free on my schedule next week :)

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  11. lisarey1990@gmail.com15 December 2018 at 03:17

    I feel so sorry for the boy. Great write.

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  12. Jo Hawk16 December 2018 at 01:21

    Poor boy

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  13. Yellow Tiger16 December 2018 at 16:22

    Seems like love and loyalty are being bestowed on somebody who doesn't deserve it one iota. Well told.

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  14. Michael Wynn16 December 2018 at 18:56

    Well written, I really felt for the boy

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  15. brudberg17 December 2018 at 01:22

    Oh.. so much not stated... but this is a sad affair.

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    1. i b arora17 December 2018 at 08:22

      Thanks; there is always a temptation to say more and leaving something unsaid is a challenge

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